4/24/2012

Still Life with Pride


I heard today you had drowned.
Can't say I'm very surprised.
I knew the day would come when
Hubris would rise in your gullet
And choke reality to death.

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Written for The Mag 114. Also linked at dVerse Open Link Night.

Posted by PattiKen
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16 comments:

  1. Brian MillerApril 24, 2012 at 6:55 PM

    well then, guess this is 'i told you so'....smiles....

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  2. VictoriaApril 24, 2012 at 7:34 PM

    As I took it, this is a powerful metaphor, Patti.

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  3. UnknownApril 24, 2012 at 9:03 PM

    Yeah, that nasty hubris stuff'll get you every time. :)

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  4. Laurie KolpApril 24, 2012 at 9:12 PM

    Concise and so very effective, Patti.

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  5. ScarletApril 24, 2012 at 9:50 PM

    Choke reality to death is a cool line. Nice to see you at D'verse ~

    Grace

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  6. steveroniApril 24, 2012 at 11:24 PM

    He STILL looks like a young Houdini in escape mode! Nice write, Patti. Lots of exposure here, ya may wanna put on a sweater--the draft, ya know?
    PEACE!

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  7. Dave KingApril 25, 2012 at 6:02 AM

    Oh, I do so like this! Neat and succinct.

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  8. Ginny BrannanApril 25, 2012 at 8:21 AM

    Concise and quite venomous! Would not want to be the person you had in mind when you wrote this!!

    (Appreciate your stopping by my blog. I knew the stanzas I wrote were a form of Quatrain, but did not realize they were also called 'envelope rhymes.' Thanks for teaching me something new!)

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  9. HelenApril 25, 2012 at 12:12 PM

    Very nice ..........

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  10. PattiKenApril 25, 2012 at 1:15 PM

    Ginny - oh, please don't take me at my word. What I know about poetry wouldn't fill a thimble. I looked the A-B-B-A rhyme and that's what I found. I have no idea if it's correct. But whatever it is, I was impressed by the way you put the whole package together!

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  11. Tess KincaidApril 25, 2012 at 3:04 PM

    Smart and classy...

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  12. BeachannyApril 25, 2012 at 4:46 PM

    A mighty metaphor Patti, that is concise and precise. Deconstructing it a little, I found it all hung on one word, "reality". Forcing one to consider "reality" in its depths. To substitute another word for it, for instance "ambition" or "avarice" would change the poem completely. WOW! Great job.

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  13. Carrie Van HornApril 25, 2012 at 8:13 PM

    An amazing write Patti! :-)

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  14. Carrie Van HornApril 25, 2012 at 8:14 PM

    An amazing write Patti! :-)

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  15. JinksyApril 26, 2012 at 3:25 AM

    Not every day you meet hubris.:)

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  16. AnonymousMay 4, 2012 at 1:25 AM

    Oooh. Ouch. Very well put. So good!

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