4/28/2012

Haiku: Silence Swells




nary a whisper
no farewell or by your leave
echoes of you fade


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Written for Haiku Heights April Heights Challenge - Day 29:  Echo (poet's choice)
Posted by PattiKen
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18 comments:

  1. GraceApril 28, 2012 at 7:33 PM

    I like the echoes of the fading whisper...exquisite haiku ~

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  2. carol l mckennaApril 28, 2012 at 8:39 PM

    echoes of you fade ~ well crafted haiku ~ lovely ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  3. steveroniApril 28, 2012 at 8:59 PM

    "...and the dish ran away with the spoon."

    (Really beautiful second wife ran off with a chef)

    Echoes faded to slight vibrations then to whispered nothings!

    Patti, HOW do you come up with these perfect haikus?

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  4. Brian MillerApril 28, 2012 at 9:24 PM

    def rings of loss...and perhaps one not understood...leaving only ripples...

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  5. rallentandaApril 28, 2012 at 9:40 PM

    Sad wistful but lovely haiku.

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  6. ChevrefeuilleApril 28, 2012 at 10:32 PM

    Echoes fading away ... nice imagery, but if the echoe is from a beloved one than it must not fade away. Than we have to cheriss them. And hold tight.

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  7. Sherry Blue SkyApril 28, 2012 at 11:50 PM

    Poignant and powerfully penned.

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  8. Jaideep RaoApril 29, 2012 at 2:07 AM

    Can't get better than this, awesome!

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  9. vivinfranceApril 29, 2012 at 2:47 AM

    That's a really good haiku, but so sad.

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  10. TomApril 29, 2012 at 9:11 AM

    might be your best! you say a lot with few words, perfect haiku

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  11. TigerbriteApril 29, 2012 at 9:34 AM

    Beautiful... so sad.

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  12. Katherine KrigeApril 29, 2012 at 10:19 AM

    gentle sadness flows here, but there is a sense of acceptance too that gives heart

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  13. Tara R.April 29, 2012 at 12:09 PM

    Silence can sometimes be deafening.

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  14. CYNOSUREApril 29, 2012 at 2:22 PM

    so deep it is...loved the thought...a great one... :)

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  15. Mohini PuranikApril 29, 2012 at 3:23 PM

    Deep and different as usual. Thanks for sharing.

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  16. Magical Mystical TeacherApril 29, 2012 at 3:57 PM

    And when the echoes have faded completely, what's left? I think I know...


    A haibun, Honey for My Soul

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  17. AnonymousMay 2, 2012 at 2:49 PM

    I don't know how I missed this one, Patti! It is awesome ~~ Thank you for the great sharing throughout the month. It's been fun!

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  18. AnonymousMay 3, 2012 at 3:21 AM

    I actually think you are very good at writing haiku, Patti. I am impressed because it is a very difficult poetic form. 'Echoes of you fade...' WOW. What a great line!

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