9/11/2012

Man Dies in Thunder Storm

(Photo by Diana Schnuth
Source: Flickr Creative Commons)
one punch and she’s down

the Fates weep in sympathy

lightning strikes revenge


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 Written for Haiku Heights - September Heights Day 12: Rain

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Posted by PattiKen
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19 comments:

  1. Vinay Leo R.September 11, 2012 at 9:35 PM

    I like the imagery of this... rain as the tears of Fate.

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  2. Judith WesterfieldSeptember 11, 2012 at 9:49 PM

    Lightning strikes revenge -- powerful words!

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  3. BarbaraSeptember 11, 2012 at 9:54 PM

    I like the images you've created especially in the last line.

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  4. Brian MillerSeptember 11, 2012 at 10:30 PM

    yay for the lightning...he deserved it...

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  5. JaniceSeptember 12, 2012 at 12:02 AM

    I love how this haiku, with the title, all comes together so wonderfully. As we've agreed on previously: he had it comin'! Ha!

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  6. DulcinaSeptember 12, 2012 at 1:13 AM

    Nature killing, taking revenge and sending sympathy at the same time, interesting haiku!
    :)

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  7. HazelSeptember 12, 2012 at 1:35 AM

    Fate exacts revenge - that punch didn't stand a chance.

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  8. odyzzSeptember 12, 2012 at 5:12 AM

    so true and so powerful...

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  9. Ramesh SoodSeptember 12, 2012 at 6:21 AM

    I stad wondering..a thoughtful haiku..

    RS:)

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  10. Reading PleasureSeptember 12, 2012 at 7:54 AM

    Powerfully written. Sad and evocative.

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  11. Magical Mystical TeacherSeptember 12, 2012 at 8:12 AM

    This, the prophets would say, is a dark saying...

    Seven Rains

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  12. JollySeptember 12, 2012 at 8:19 AM

    A haiku of epic proportions. Such vivid imagery. And loved the notion of the tears of the Fates, and the vengeful lightning.

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  13. LocomenteSeptember 12, 2012 at 8:36 AM

    Unique and tragic take on the prompt...
    Good!!!

    http://locomente.blogspot.in/2012/09/and-i-fell-in-love.html

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  14. Sri ValliSeptember 12, 2012 at 9:00 AM

    What a beautiful tiny story within haiku..Lovely...Different take on the prompt!

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  15. Katherine KrigeSeptember 12, 2012 at 1:18 PM

    Ouch! Guess he shouldn't have been golfing in the rain...

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  16. TigerbriteSeptember 12, 2012 at 1:22 PM

    Revenge of the Gods :) Strong one.

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  17. AnonymousSeptember 12, 2012 at 1:42 PM

    Nothing to exact revenge like nature! Well done.

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  18. AnonymousSeptember 12, 2012 at 8:22 PM

    The power of nature, and the revenge she can deliver.
    September Heights - Skies' Joy

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  19. UnknownSeptember 13, 2012 at 3:54 PM

    Wow, this haiku is deeply moving.

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