5/23/2010

100 Word Challenge: Less Than Meets the Eye


This was written for this week's prompt, "sanitary," at Velvet Verbosity's 100 Word Challenge.

Less than Meets the Eye


Oh, sure, she put up a good front. From the tricked-out look of her, you’d swear she was one of the “good” ones. All proper and polished, the way she was. Not like the rest of us, who, Mama always said, looked like we’d slept in our clothes. “Why cain’t ya'll be more like her,” Mama said after she saw her for the first time. “Girl’s got class.”

And then she opened her mouth and, oh, my, the words that came out. Mama was appalled. “You cain’t be carryin’ words like that around in your mouth. It just ain’t sanitary!”


13 comments:

  1. lol. you gave me quite the chuckle with this one. it always seemed justice to me when those my parents revered and challenged me to be like, fell. maybe that is bad, but i was a kid. smiles.

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  2. I love the irony. It IS what's inside that counts. (A wee bit of Ivory for that mouth, please.)

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  3. Too funny! It reminds me of my older sister who would, literally, get her mouth washed out with a bar of soap by our Italian babysitter. I've always wondered why she never taught us Italian - I suspected that she probably did a lot of swearing and arguing with her husband.

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  4. I thought this was going to be about soap... lol!

    Love the end.

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  5. LOL definitely can't judge a book by it's cover!

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  6. LOL.

    But who is she to talk with all the "aints"? Tsk.

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  7. This was wonderful. It reminded me of my grandmother... not that I ever had my mouth 'sanitized' with Ivory soap.

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  8. A nun at my grammar school said the same thing about a new girl in our 3rd grade. She payed attention and really listened and was conscientious, etc. First time she got frustrated, she swore like a trooper! We had the last laugh. Great post.

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  9. you are quite funny.
    humorous writing.

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    one poetry award.
    Have fun!

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  11. Thanks for your visit and comments, Everyone.

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  12. Yay-us!!! That's the two syllable version of 'Yes', straight from the South.

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  13. Lou, I surely do thank you, you sweet thang.

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