4/17/2012

Haiku: White Space





left barren, white space
desolated picnic place
lifelines time erased



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Written for Haiku Heights April Heights Challenge - Day 18:  White

19 comments:

  1. I think most beautiful places sometimes are cursed the way you have mentioned.. beautiful Patti..good to see you among the first contributors.. RS:)

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  2. I think most beautiful places sometimes are cursed the way you have mentioned.. beautiful Patti..good to see you among the first contributors.. RS:)

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  4. We never know whether a white patch was purely white frm d beginning or has gone through a lot of black spots before... But what matters is the present... so white it is!

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  5. where is this? barren...sometimes that might not be a bad place to go though...to get away...

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  6. "Lifelines time erased"...very true...

    everything gets erased...no one knows when, but it happens...very well written... :)

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  7. Powerful "lifelines erased"! Lovely drama in the stillness of this haiku!

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  8. Beautiful words and so true !

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  10. Words so true of nature, like the town time deserted. Beautiful haiku, Patti.

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  11. I specially like the left barren, white space ~ Nice haiku ~

    Grace

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  12. I think I will pass on this desolated picnic space, thank you. A little too icy for my blood!

    “Hungry Sunrise Fire & White Bird”

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  13. That "left barren, white space" image could work for many things; I like it. And that photo is amazing.

    Richard

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  14. Lovely haiku together with the picture. Awesome.

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  15. I loved the way you rhymed it...It's not that easy to rhyme in a haiku....Beautifully done!

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  16. I loved the way you rhymed it...It's not that easy to rhyme in a haiku....Beautifully done!

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  17. This has a very melancholy feel to it. Lovely, yet sad.

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  18. This has a very melancholy feel to it. Lovely, yet sad.

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  19. Beautiful atmosphere in your words and photo :)

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