I heard today you had drowned.
Can't say I'm very surprised.
I knew the day would come when
Hubris would rise in your
gullet
And choke reality to death.
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16 comments:
well then, guess this is 'i told you so'....smiles....
As I took it, this is a powerful metaphor, Patti.
Yeah, that nasty hubris stuff'll get you every time. :)
Concise and so very effective, Patti.
Choke reality to death is a cool line. Nice to see you at D'verse ~
Grace
He STILL looks like a young Houdini in escape mode! Nice write, Patti. Lots of exposure here, ya may wanna put on a sweater--the draft, ya know?
PEACE!
Oh, I do so like this! Neat and succinct.
Concise and quite venomous! Would not want to be the person you had in mind when you wrote this!!
(Appreciate your stopping by my blog. I knew the stanzas I wrote were a form of Quatrain, but did not realize they were also called 'envelope rhymes.' Thanks for teaching me something new!)
Very nice ..........
Ginny - oh, please don't take me at my word. What I know about poetry wouldn't fill a thimble. I looked the A-B-B-A rhyme and that's what I found. I have no idea if it's correct. But whatever it is, I was impressed by the way you put the whole package together!
Smart and classy...
A mighty metaphor Patti, that is concise and precise. Deconstructing it a little, I found it all hung on one word, "reality". Forcing one to consider "reality" in its depths. To substitute another word for it, for instance "ambition" or "avarice" would change the poem completely. WOW! Great job.
An amazing write Patti! :-)
An amazing write Patti! :-)
Not every day you meet hubris.:)
Oooh. Ouch. Very well put. So good!
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