4/24/2012

Still Life with Pride


I heard today you had drowned.
Can't say I'm very surprised.
I knew the day would come when
Hubris would rise in your gullet
And choke reality to death.

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Written for The Mag 114. Also linked at dVerse Open Link Night.

16 comments:

Brian Miller said...

well then, guess this is 'i told you so'....smiles....

Victoria said...

As I took it, this is a powerful metaphor, Patti.

LceeL said...

Yeah, that nasty hubris stuff'll get you every time. :)

Laurie Kolp said...

Concise and so very effective, Patti.

Heaven said...

Choke reality to death is a cool line. Nice to see you at D'verse ~

Grace

Steve E said...

He STILL looks like a young Houdini in escape mode! Nice write, Patti. Lots of exposure here, ya may wanna put on a sweater--the draft, ya know?
PEACE!

Dave King said...

Oh, I do so like this! Neat and succinct.

Ginny Brannan said...

Concise and quite venomous! Would not want to be the person you had in mind when you wrote this!!

(Appreciate your stopping by my blog. I knew the stanzas I wrote were a form of Quatrain, but did not realize they were also called 'envelope rhymes.' Thanks for teaching me something new!)

Helen said...

Very nice ..........

PattiKen said...

Ginny - oh, please don't take me at my word. What I know about poetry wouldn't fill a thimble. I looked the A-B-B-A rhyme and that's what I found. I have no idea if it's correct. But whatever it is, I was impressed by the way you put the whole package together!

Tess Kincaid said...

Smart and classy...

Beachanny said...

A mighty metaphor Patti, that is concise and precise. Deconstructing it a little, I found it all hung on one word, "reality". Forcing one to consider "reality" in its depths. To substitute another word for it, for instance "ambition" or "avarice" would change the poem completely. WOW! Great job.

Carrie Burtt said...

An amazing write Patti! :-)

Carrie Burtt said...

An amazing write Patti! :-)

Jinksy said...

Not every day you meet hubris.:)

Selma said...

Oooh. Ouch. Very well put. So good!