left barren, white space
desolated picnic place
lifelines time erased
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Written for Haiku Heights April Heights Challenge - Day 18: White
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19 comments:
I think most beautiful places sometimes are cursed the way you have mentioned.. beautiful Patti..good to see you among the first contributors.. RS:)
I think most beautiful places sometimes are cursed the way you have mentioned.. beautiful Patti..good to see you among the first contributors.. RS:)
We never know whether a white patch was purely white frm d beginning or has gone through a lot of black spots before... But what matters is the present... so white it is!
where is this? barren...sometimes that might not be a bad place to go though...to get away...
"Lifelines time erased"...very true...
everything gets erased...no one knows when, but it happens...very well written... :)
Powerful "lifelines erased"! Lovely drama in the stillness of this haiku!
Beautiful words and so true !
Words so true of nature, like the town time deserted. Beautiful haiku, Patti.
I specially like the left barren, white space ~ Nice haiku ~
Grace
I think I will pass on this desolated picnic space, thank you. A little too icy for my blood!
“Hungry Sunrise Fire & White Bird”
That "left barren, white space" image could work for many things; I like it. And that photo is amazing.
Richard
Lovely haiku together with the picture. Awesome.
I loved the way you rhymed it...It's not that easy to rhyme in a haiku....Beautifully done!
I loved the way you rhymed it...It's not that easy to rhyme in a haiku....Beautifully done!
This has a very melancholy feel to it. Lovely, yet sad.
This has a very melancholy feel to it. Lovely, yet sad.
Beautiful atmosphere in your words and photo :)
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