10/19/2010

Wondering Why The Sun Goes Down


She wonders why...
her emotions erupt at his every phrase.
his smile makes her sun shine bright.
his glance elsewhere thunders in her heart.

She wonders how...
he can move her mountains with only words.
she could have surrendered control.
it has come to this.

She wonders why...
his approval matters so much.
she worries that she’s losing him.
she ever thought she had him.

She wonders if...
he ever thinks about her.
he knows his power over her.
he knows her at all.

She wonders why...
she cares.

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This is my offering for One Shot Wednesday.



31 comments:

  1. because to know and be known are some of the most inate desires...smiles. nice one shot patti!

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  2. He should use his powers for good and not for evil... but short of that, she should run like hell. She can always ask those questions from a very safe distance (and it sounds like she's getting there, from that last sentence).

    This piece resonates, Patti.

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  3. She needs to get over it and find someone that appreciates creative brilliant talent!

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  4. Hi Patti,
    This is an easy one to resonate with. Oh, the mind questions... great reflection of them in your poem, and i love the ending.. xo

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  5. This is truly a poem that speaks to many. Great write!

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  6. Relationships that are so difficult usually are not worth the pain of wondering....but everyone is different...bkm

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  7. love is not infatuation. but oh oh oh the addiction to infatuation....

    You dug this out of somewhere hidden, Patti,

    I like!
    Dianne

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  8. He should realize her intrinsic beauty and strength and desirability.
    She is a prize....

    Love from the Moon

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  9. Well done! This is just were a lot of women are ... don't expect enough and so don't get it. The repitition and the last two lines: perfect!

    Thanks for a good read and fine One Shot ... :-)

    Poem on ...

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  10. Oh, dear. This rings a bell...I think I have been in this relationship. It wasn't pretty. I still wonder why I cared.

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  11. So very deep and questioning. Great words.

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  12. The answer to each question is simple. Because.

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  13. Does she wonder what he wonders? Could they mirror each other?

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  14. Wowzers, this one packs a zinger! Well done!

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  15. The perfect dilemma of lover... as somewhere Leo Tolstoy (I think not sure) said... " Love is mutual admiration society, and the one whose love is less intense, is the chairperson..."
    I enjoyed reading this one...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
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  16. A touch situation nicely summed-up. A poignant One Shot.

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  17. always difficult if one loves more than the other - you found just the perfect words for this patti

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  18. A tough situation, this is, when he is near yet far. Great one shot.

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  19. I know I commented yesterday, but since you commented twice on my post. I felt compelled to return the favor.
    Well...? Did she dump the unappreciative cur yet?
    You are a brilliant and insightful writer ya know

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  20. the never ending tribulations of the heart!!

    great writing, poignant

    :)

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  21. The line that really gets me is when she wonders if he ever thinks about her. The tone is so honest and the poem well written. Cheers.

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  22. Thank you for your comments, everyone. So, to answer the question, did she come to her senses and dump him? Not entirely, have found that he did have his uses... ;-)

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  23. this was sad....perhaps he wonders too much and should take more control...a wonderful write,,thanks for sharing Pete

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  24. I wonder... This is an interesting one shot. Love and Light, Sender

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  25. I've totally been i her shoes. Excellent my friend.

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  26. Excellent write-- moving from the opening lines-- a metaphor?-- right through to the final realization! Nicely done.

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  27. Good imagery, effective, relatable.

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  28. yes..dear Patti, why..she is wondering but sometimes there are Questions that cannot be answered, best to remain floating in the space for divine smiles to reply.
    This is one of the best poems i have read recently..TOUCHED! :)

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  29. That's the kind of imbalanced relationship that is doomed.

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  30. Simply beautiful, I took all of it in and exhaled. haha Easy on the eyes and a good read. Great```

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