1/07/2011

Succinct Verbosity in 55 Words


I used to be able to express myself in few words,
Back before I began trying to “write.”
I got all caught up in voice, tense and tone,
And succinctness faded from sight.

What once I could say in 55 words
Now takes 500 or more, and
My path to “the point"
Is littered with…

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If you can say it in 55 words, go tell G-Man.
Posted by PattiKen
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22 comments:

  1. g-manJanuary 7, 2011 at 12:11 AM

    Oh Patti....
    You are such a satirist....
    LOved your truncated story...:P
    Thank you for playing today, and have a Kick Ass Week-End!

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  2. signed...bkmJanuary 7, 2011 at 12:39 AM

    Truth, truth and truth in 55 words...did I use the right tone?...bkm

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  3. anthonynorthJanuary 7, 2011 at 3:58 AM

    Great fun :-)
    I always try to be as minimalist as possible. Not easy sometimes.

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  4. KatherineJanuary 7, 2011 at 6:57 AM

    Oh.. I do know what you mean! Great 55!

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  5. moondustwriterJanuary 7, 2011 at 7:14 AM

    verbose isn't that the definition of a writer?

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  6. Strummed WordsJanuary 7, 2011 at 9:34 AM

    Well said! My 55

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  7. izzyJanuary 7, 2011 at 9:42 AM

    Is littered with: CHANGE! the only permanent thing- Thanks for posting-

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  8. Maude LynnJanuary 7, 2011 at 10:18 AM

    Oh, that's hilarious!

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  9. gautami tripathyJanuary 7, 2011 at 10:38 AM

    55 said it all!

    Here is mine:
    curtain of pebbled path

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  10. TALONJanuary 7, 2011 at 11:07 AM

    lol! I loved this! The curse of the writer :)


    My 55: escapee

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  11. Jannie FunsterJanuary 7, 2011 at 12:00 PM

    Patti! Patti! Patti!

    What a treat to see you over in Funsterland again!

    And to read your 55 that says what 5555 could not.

    xoxo

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  12. Alice AudreyJanuary 7, 2011 at 12:28 PM

    I'm going the other direction. The more I've been writing, the few words I use to say it.

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  13. Grandmother MaryJanuary 7, 2011 at 1:01 PM

    Ain't it the truth! Well done.

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  14. Monkey ManJanuary 7, 2011 at 1:37 PM

    Oh that is so true. Yet it is odd that now when I sit down to write it almost always ends up being 55 words. It appears to be the perfect number for my little brain. When I try to expand the thought I find....

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  15. joannaJanuary 7, 2011 at 4:05 PM

    Some of my best writes were in 55 words or less like Haiku's -- they make you think of better ways to express yourself. sort of like a picture is worth a thousand words, sigh -

    Nice write as always you do have a way with words short or long always a delight to read.

    cheers,
    joanny

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  16. limeJanuary 7, 2011 at 4:05 PM

    hahah, some weeks it is a challenge isn't it?

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  17. Yvonne OsborneJanuary 7, 2011 at 10:20 PM

    How true. I like the 55 because it forces me to be succinct. A very good exercise for the writer in me! Excellent 55 you have going here, one we can all relate to.

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  18. Katherine KrigeJanuary 8, 2011 at 12:33 AM

    I have always been teased with my verbose ways, so I feel your pain!

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  19. AnonymousJanuary 8, 2011 at 8:49 PM

    Patti, this is right up my alley; I love to read the verbose writing of the classics, and I love the succinctness of Haiku. You are so good at the humorous stuff...this one is wonderful :)

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  20. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 9, 2011 at 11:20 AM

    hee hee - so true.

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  21. MargaretJanuary 9, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Wonderful sense of humor. I was entertained the entire way through!

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  22. KavitaJanuary 10, 2011 at 7:40 PM

    this is awesome, Patti! I think I too am beginning to suffer from verbal diarrhea.. :))
    Thanks to G for having the 55 word challenge, else I would have certainly been drowning in my own words.. heheh
    But trust me, your path to the point is way straighter than you think! :) And it is CERTAINLY NOT littered with dots.. (too corny, eh? giggles)

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