9/11/2012

Man Dies in Thunder Storm

(Photo by Diana Schnuth
Source: Flickr Creative Commons)


one punch and she’s down

the Fates weep in sympathy

lightning strikes revenge


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 Written for Haiku Heights - September Heights Day 12: Rain

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19 comments:

  1. I like the imagery of this... rain as the tears of Fate.

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  2. Lightning strikes revenge -- powerful words!

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  3. I like the images you've created especially in the last line.

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  4. yay for the lightning...he deserved it...

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  5. I love how this haiku, with the title, all comes together so wonderfully. As we've agreed on previously: he had it comin'! Ha!

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  6. Nature killing, taking revenge and sending sympathy at the same time, interesting haiku!
    :)

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  7. Fate exacts revenge - that punch didn't stand a chance.

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  8. I stad wondering..a thoughtful haiku..

    RS:)

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  9. Powerfully written. Sad and evocative.

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  10. A haiku of epic proportions. Such vivid imagery. And loved the notion of the tears of the Fates, and the vengeful lightning.

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  11. Unique and tragic take on the prompt...
    Good!!!

    http://locomente.blogspot.in/2012/09/and-i-fell-in-love.html

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  12. What a beautiful tiny story within haiku..Lovely...Different take on the prompt!

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  13. Ouch! Guess he shouldn't have been golfing in the rain...

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  14. Revenge of the Gods :) Strong one.

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  15. Nothing to exact revenge like nature! Well done.

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  16. The power of nature, and the revenge she can deliver.
    September Heights - Skies' Joy

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  17. Wow, this haiku is deeply moving.

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