My fall from grace was
unexpected.It hurt like the
devil; I can tell you that.
unexpected.It hurt like the
devil; I can tell you that.
With the flick of a finger
and careless aim, you sent me
flying from the promised land
like an inconvenient crumb
sullying the surface of your life.
Through no fault of my own,
penance paid or so it seemed,
redemption came today.
Angels sang and golden
rays shone from the heavens
as, with nary a trumpet, the
pearly gates cracked open
with the dawn. Hallelujah.
pearly gates cracked open
with the dawn. Hallelujah.
Once again, I was saved.
Or was it doomed? Because
then I discovered you wanted
something. Figures.
then I discovered you wanted
something. Figures.
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Angels sang and golden
ReplyDeleterays shone from the heavens
as, with nary a trumpet, the
pearly gates cracked open
with the dawn. Hallelujah.
... isn't God's grace wonderful?
I really like the religious imagery and "it hurt like the devil" -- serious, yet a little playful.
ReplyDeleteha. isnt that the case....always wanting something....they toss you aside then come find you when they do...smiles...err....
ReplyDeleteouch. a harsh lesson learned the hard way.
ReplyDeletestrikingly true and poetic your words are. much enjoyed, thanks~
ReplyDeleteWas this written for that nun I had in 5th grade? If not, I'm sure I know him/her. Good for you, you sorted out all those deviant, underlying reasons why people could say, "you're sure to go straight to". More likely the reverse, I say.
ReplyDeleteOh this reminds me of...me ...lol
ReplyDeleteAll I ever seem to hear is... "I love you... can I?"
"I love you, I want." ...etc etc
So, reading through this although I loved the imagery, the last word made me nod and smile... 'Figures'
Right.
i like the contrast in your verse
ReplyDelete“then I discovered you wanted / something. Figures.”
ReplyDeleteYou managed to convey and so playfully! And “so demption came today” Nice.
I love the subtle humor in this. And "hurt like the devil" is a perfect choice of words.
ReplyDeleteoh oh...makes me think of that "religious" group that name i'm not going to mention...ha
ReplyDeleteThere's always a price...funny that!
ReplyDeleteOh no...does this mean you have to be a sweet little goody two shoes now? The change might be too much for you:)
ReplyDeleteNothing is ever as it seems. Or so it seems.
ReplyDeleteGreat lines in the second stanza...well written....
ReplyDeleteI like this very much 'Figures' wraps it all up nicely
ReplyDeleteHmmm...that's the way it goes sometimes.
ReplyDeleteyikes...relief and realization...I can identify with this piece.
ReplyDeleteThere's always more to give, isn't there. I relate.
ReplyDeleteThat last stanza makes you realize that nothing is freely given if the other party wants more and more ~
ReplyDeleteHave a good week ~
Wow, heavy religious images.
ReplyDeleteIt is always a mistake, it seems, to seek any sort of salvation in the other, eh?
I so hear you, Patti. Yup. "Figures!"
ReplyDeleteAm I reading too much into this? I do like it though. Perhaps I think too much.
ReplyDeletepattiken=not sure if I read this the right way, but.........God does save us and His salvation sounds like 'let go!' an awful lot. Yes, He does want something--surrender--all of us. Stunning picture, succinct words. (Thanks for the comment over at another facet, btw.)
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