(Photo by Danny Ouellet
Source: Stockvault)
There's a place at
edge of light
Where thin the
line 'tween day and night
Where nightmares
wait just out of sight
And sunshine turns
to dark.
There's a place in
black of night
Where safety
fades, replaced with fright
Where nightmares
come with dad's goodnight
And childhood life
departs.
There's a place
above the deep
Where ere I jump,
I stand and weep
And pray the lord
my soul to keep
From this body
torn apart.
There's a place
where nightmares dwell
Where witches
cackle and conjure spells
Where demons
dance, escaped from hell
And hate pervades
the heart.
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damn, you are trying to make sure i dont sleep tonight arent you...shivers...the rhythm is as haunting as the images...something sinister this way comes....smiles.
ReplyDeleteFlawlessly done! Love it!
ReplyDeleteNice write! There is a place....
ReplyDeleteVery Halloween-esque, creepy and spine-tingling.
ReplyDeleteooh, so chilling... i know this place. fabulous cadence.
ReplyDeleteWell, this certainly gets me in the Halloween mood. Loved the way you worked so effectively with rhyme.
ReplyDeletesort of bradburyish
ReplyDeleteThis is perfect for Haunting Halloween ~ It's creepy,yikes ~
ReplyDeleteThe rhyming is flawless, and talk about mood and atmosphere. I had to turn on an extra light! Well done, kiddo.
ReplyDeleteWell, I'll sleep with the radio on (softly) tonight. Patti, this sounds as if you've been there. Maybe all have, to an extent.
ReplyDeleteYour words come close to perfection, Patti!
PEACE!
I agree, chilling and perfectly executed.
ReplyDeleteYes, chilling - perfect for the upcoming holiday.
ReplyDeleteRhyme, diction, cadence and mood are all spot on, Patti. You did yourself proud with this one, along the lines of James Whitcomb Riley's 'Little Orphant Annie.'
ReplyDeleteHaunting and sad. I felt as though it was an account from the heart of an abused child.
ReplyDeleteoh my goodness...this gave me shivers...and i'm glad it's morning and the sun's about to rise soon..
ReplyDeleteThis is the stuff of real nightmares. The type I used to have.
ReplyDeleteA very effective, scary read.
Nightmares..incorporated into rhyme..the basis of fears some real, some imagined - tales of truth told through the ages, warnings to all. So well delivered here in your chilling verse.
ReplyDeleteVery scary! your rhyme and cadence add significantly to the mood of this poem. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAll I can think is that whenever I go somewhere in a dark room, I can feel the creepy feeling of someone watching me. It's really scary.
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That is perfect Patti. I love the flow and rhyme of it. You paint a dark picture that I had to read aloud to give more strength to.
ReplyDeleteScary but perfect write - we all have our dark places and generally are more aware of them when night falls...
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Patti, your work has a dark touch to it these days...not a bad thing btw
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