11/02/2010

Waiting No More

Sitting in these chairs
I try to remember a time when you weren’t here.
But all I can remember is
The day you walked into my life and turned the lights on.

Sitting in these chairs
I try to remember when I was empty
But all I can feel is
How completely you filled me up.

Sitting in these chairs
I try to remember having the bed to myself
But all I dream of is
Knowing you are sleeping at my side.

Sitting in these chairs
I try to remember what  I saw, walking on my own
But all I see is
How your view of things opened my eyes.

Sitting in these chairs
I try to remember what it was like to eat alone
But all I can taste is
How delicious food was with you across the table.
 
Sitting in these chairs,
I try to remember being young
But all I know is
I was always young in your eyes.

Sitting in these chairs
I try to remember what it was like to be alone
But all I know is
I thought  I’d never be lonely again.
 
Sitting in these chairs
I try to imagine what it will be like with you gone
But all I can picture is
Nothing.

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This was written for One Shot Wednesday.

43 comments:

  1. And perhaps that person sitting in that chair will never be gone, not really. Nice one.

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  2. That is tremendously powerful and so touching.

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  3. oh patti this is just beautiful and so touching - no more waiting - you found and are being found...great one shot!

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  4. Beautiful, when the darkness can no longer be seen

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  5. Hi Patti,
    why did this bring tears to my eyes? Oh, that would be because I simply love a sentimental poem. Lovely! xo

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  6. The joy of the beginning and the poignant punch of the ending are both amazing. Great poetry.

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  7. But all I can remember is
    The day you walked into my life and turned the lights on.

    ahhh Patti..I LOVE IT..soo touchy, heartfelt and i am really speechless, enjoyed the lines and the repetition served it so well! Perfect one shot dear..:)

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  8. Very moving lines, Patti. The ending hits like a ton of bricks emotionally. The memories are beautifully sad.

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  9. Wow so many angles to look at this. The speaker can be talking about a friend, a parent, a teacher, a lover
    The end result of people being absent was perfectly written

    glad I can call you friend

    Moonie hugs

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  10. Ah rather lovely Patti. With a daughter about to leave home, a husband long dead and my closest friend many miles away, chairs have quite a bit of resonance with me at the moment . .they're my lifeline in many ways.

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  11. what i feel is watching a spouse pass away....hard...some great line patti...i too like the turning on of the lights...i know that feeling...

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  12. no need to try to remember the time before...make new memories now

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  13. But all I can remember is
    The day you walked into my life and turned the lights on.


    that is exactly how I feel about my husband :)

    great touching poem.

    Thanks you for stopping by my place, I'm very touched that you pictured your daughter when reading it :)
    Thanks for sharing it with me, it gives me a stronger reason to keep writing.

    loveNlight
    Gabi

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  14. I can relate to this. I can't imagine a life without my Steve.

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  15. Patti...
    Beautiful, touching, heartfelt, sad.

    You are such a talented writer, this was one of the most moving poems that I've read on One Shot.
    You Rock Patti Cake....:P

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  16. Sad!! this moved me, my chest tightened...what wonderful writing!

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  17. Oh, this is so beautiful...what an amazing piece... ;_; The ending is sad and heartwarming at the same time.

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  18. "All I can picture is nothing..." what a powerful way to end the verse... Its nostalgic and sad... I relate to this very much...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  19. The powerful overwhelming view from love... nostalgic piece well done.

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  20. A beautifully moving poem - I love that your partner "turned the lights on". The fullness of relationship is so lovingly expressed here. A quite wonderful thing to read for us romantics:)

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  21. An ideal relationship...nice...I hope this is something you have been lucky enough to personally experience.

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  22. that was a wonderful write patty...that hits home with such a powerful ending...thanks for sharing..pete

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  23. This is astounding, awesome LOVE for the partner.. Oh so much that without him nothing would remain.
    Lucky you lucky him for having you sitting there...

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  24. People come for a reason into our lives... but we sometimes are not ready to let go and grow up... nice poem...

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  25. Best to dwell in the present and enjoy the memories. Thanks for sharing them with us!

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  26. You write like I feel. Twins. I'm so glad I've come to know you.

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  27. I love how you took a cold waiting room and made it warm, human, real, like the part of your life that "came to life" just by knowing another. And the end suggests both a celebration and a tragedy. My heart was touched. Beautiful poem. :)

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  28. Beautiful! The repeated refrain (sitting in this chair..) works very, very well....a chain of sentiment and remembrance.

    Lady Nyo

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  29. All I can picture is nothing -- oh how this resonates with me.

    Beautiful, Patti. Thank you.

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  30. Solid use of repetition/structure and sensory info.

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  31. Thank you, Everyone, for your visits and comments. I wish I could reply to each of you individually, but then I wouldn't have had time to read as many of your posts. Selfishly, that was no contest. ;-)

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  32. what a beautiful verse so full of love. That paints true love and is enough to make anyone's heart ache.

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  33. Oh... So beautiful and sad. It's weird, as I was reading it, I was thinking how hard it is for me to picture having someone in my life. I'm glad you share your view of real love and that you have had that in your life! Thanks for sharing!

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  34. The gift that is illustrated and embodied in the companionship is wonderful. So often we forget to appreciate what another brings into our life. You capture it well here.

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  35. Full of heartache and the verge of acceptance. Sad but beautiful-- nicely done!

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  36. This is gorgeous and heartbreaking!

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  37. A very beautiful poem. A reminder how precious we all are.

    I feel that way about my husband too. And one day one of us will go to say something and remember the other is gone.

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  38. This one grabs my heart and won't let go. Tender and fierce, all at once, this reminder that here and now is, well, now.

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