8/29/2012

The Puppet

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Sometimes he's subtle

Except when he's not

He lifts a finger

And she dances a jig

Keeping time to his tune

Wondering what’s come over her

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Written for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads where Mama Zen asks us to write a poem in twenty-five words or less, using a "power image," one we return to over and over.

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18 comments:

  1. I had the complete opposite response. I found the piece really chilling.

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  2. very good...and my response was more in line with MZ

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  3. when someone has that much control over another...i def find it to be quite scary...

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  4. The poem seems light at first,an easy metaphor, but when you read it again after watching the video, it was indeed chilling, even frightening in that 'evil clown' way, except of course, I'm identifying with puppet.

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  5. Wow, "keeping time to his tune." Sure hope this is fantasy and fiction; if not, then RUN. Now. Spooky images.

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  6. Interesting view of the prompt! I wonder whether she was fighting his control.

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  7. The idea of person as puppet chills me to the core. Powerful write.

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  8. Found it amusing but frightening as well. Nice write, Patti!

    Hank

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  9. I've known way too many 'puppets' in my life ... your poem is beautifully composed!!!

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  10. Hmmm...I see the chilling in it but at the same time in a sensual way if in a "moment, " with a lover...this metaphor could work this way too.

    Well written, Patti!!

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  11. an interesting image.....sometimes we too are puppets.....

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  12. And she too, if she's brave, finds she's being controlled and cuts the strings. Good one, Patti.

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  13. Interesting! I had to re-read it to get the essence all the more. Very nicely written! :)

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  14. Puppets are great teaching tools- but they can also be spooky!

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  15. Oh,dear...time to cut the strings and escape.

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  16. I'm amazed that I have not seen this amazing performance before. My former cat companion, Pierette, was named for Pierrot. This sad clown in the French commedia tradition is well used in your poem!

    Brilliant. Brevity even enhances your power image.

    So much is going on here: Male-female, parent-child, government-individual, pusher-junkie--and as the latter dances on strings, she may wonder indeed! There is a sense that she took the strings willingly, and then the realization that cutting loose would mean death. Better never to have wanted what the pusher had to sell? Not to your film-maker. But you leave the question open.

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  17. It actually haunts me, especially now that I watched the video and how the puppet is just a heap on the floor at the end... Chilling.

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