3/19/2010

Friday Flash 55

 

Cutting the Cord

The day they tied the knot was the first day of “happily ever after.”  Or so she thought.  Who knew he would be so controlling?  He held her so tightly, she was suffocating. 
She met him at the front door, the knife behind her back.  Taking a deep breath, she severed the tie that binds.

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This was written for G-Man's Friday Flash 55.  There are lots more 55s at his place.  Stop in.
Posted by PattiKen
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35 comments:

  1. BuzzardMarch 19, 2010 at 12:43 AM

    You are such a die hard romantic. LOL


    Mine is here: My Invisibility

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  2. anthonynorthMarch 19, 2010 at 4:59 AM

    A powerful ending.
    Nicely done.

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  3. MonaMarch 19, 2010 at 5:24 AM

    That was so literal and shocking to the senses! Excellent 55ve!

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  4. Brian MillerMarch 19, 2010 at 6:32 AM

    whoa....scariness...
    nice 55, but thats a bit harsh for leaving the toilet seat up...smiles.

    my 55 is up!

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  5. Peter StoneMarch 19, 2010 at 6:51 AM

    Yep, that's one way to sever that cord, ouch. Didn't see that end coming.

    My 55 is Everything I Lack

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  6. Hootin AnniMarch 19, 2010 at 7:55 AM

    That's too bad there really wasn't a 'happily ever after'.

    Here's mine Take Pleasure - 101

    Have a super terrific weekend.

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  7. UnknownMarch 19, 2010 at 9:44 AM

    Now THAT was unexpected. There's a little diabolical in that lovely mind of yours.

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  8. PattiKenMarch 19, 2010 at 10:37 AM

    Buzzard: Ah, shucks, I know. Just can’t help myself. I’m such a sap for happy endings. ;-)

    Anthony and Mona: Thank you!

    Brian: Yeah, maybe, but you should have seen what he did to the toothpaste tube!

    Peter: Sometimes a woman’s gotta do what a woman’s gotta do…

    Hootin’ A: I’m guessing that for her, it WAS a happy ending.

    Lou: Diabolical? Moi??? My own sweet self? Glad I could surprise you.

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  9. JessieMarch 19, 2010 at 11:56 AM

    wow -- i guess there was no turning back or a hope for reconcilation on this one!!

    well told.
    smiles,

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  10. Tara R.March 19, 2010 at 1:52 PM

    Didn't see that coming. Nicely played.

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  11. Teresa OMarch 19, 2010 at 2:08 PM

    Wow! I thought conveying my thoughts in just 100 words difficult. This is an astounding 55 words with romance, frustration, mystery, and a whodunit all rolled into one neat package.

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  12. NessaMarch 19, 2010 at 2:55 PM

    Go get 'em, girl.

    Flash 55 - Help?

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  13. Stan SkiMarch 19, 2010 at 8:40 PM

    Actions speak louder than words...

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  14. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallMarch 19, 2010 at 9:37 PM

    wow,
    that's horror movie clips...
    gifted writing,
    cheers!

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  15. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallMarch 19, 2010 at 9:37 PM

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/03/19/55-how-do-you-relax-during-weekends/

    thank you for checking me up!
    new hand...

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  16. lettuceMarch 20, 2010 at 6:05 AM

    phew! good one!

    perfect photo for this too, i like it

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  17. PattiKenMarch 20, 2010 at 11:09 AM

    Jessie: No, not much of a chance at all. ;-)

    Tara R: Thanks. To tell the truth, I didn’t see it coming either.

    Teresa: Thanks! I’m so glad you liked it.

    Nessa: I am woman; hear me roar!

    Stan Ski: Indeed.

    Ji: Thank you.

    Lettuce: Thanks!

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  18. MojoMarch 20, 2010 at 2:50 PM

    Can't say I didn't see that one coming. I'm getting visions of Lorena Bobbitt...

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  19. SherryMarch 20, 2010 at 3:07 PM

    I loved this one - there are a lot of controlling people out there!

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  20. Alice AudreyMarch 20, 2010 at 4:11 PM

    Whoah! Now that's taking measures into your own hands.

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  21. AnonymousMarch 20, 2010 at 4:44 PM

    WOAH!!! I loved this one. Didn't see that ending. Good for her :)

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  22. MahaMarch 20, 2010 at 5:45 PM

    I loved the line "He held her so hard she was suffocating" When love mean control, it's no longer love, rather a passion for possession. Very-well written.
    Thanks for stopping by!

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  23. Connie T.March 20, 2010 at 6:26 PM

    I like this, nicely done.

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  24. SandyCarlsonMarch 20, 2010 at 10:05 PM

    That's one way to solve the problem!

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  25. Ms.DaisyMarch 20, 2010 at 11:44 PM

    Wow! Very nicely done and such a surprise ending ... and all in a mere 55 words!

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  26. LarryMarch 21, 2010 at 3:19 AM



    Zephyr's Revenge 1-4

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  27. jabblogMarch 21, 2010 at 6:33 AM

    Excellent - hope her circulation was up to it after all that tight holding ;-)

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  28. Grandmother MaryMarch 21, 2010 at 11:50 AM

    A full story in 55 words- now that's amazing!

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  29. PattiKenMarch 21, 2010 at 6:35 PM

    Mojo: Huh. That never entered my mind. Wouldn’t work, though, because he’d probably have survived.

    Sherry: Yup.

    AA: Ya gotta take care of yourself, ya know?

    Thom: You got that right.

    Maha: Same to you!

    Connie: Thanks!

    Sandy: There were no doubt others, but she always preferred the shortest route.

    Ms. Daisy: Thank you!

    Larry: Thanks for the link. I’ll check it out.

    Jabblog: Oh, yeah, and it got better!

    Grandmother: Thank you!

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  30. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallMarch 21, 2010 at 7:01 PM

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/03/21/wise-words-award/

    creative writing award for you,
    Happy Sunday!

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  31. UnknownMarch 22, 2010 at 2:49 AM

    Patti,

    AWESOME! I kept thinking I have seen your FF. Talk about keeping the LAST FOR BEST! You just kick off my week with a BANG!
    Pleased to tell you that I know EXACTLY what you are talking about, I took the plunge too, after 12 years of a bad marriage.

    My SUPERHERO SUNDAY my Sunday 160 and Microfiction Monday for your perusal and SUNDAY STEALING!

    Have a BLESSED and FRUITFUL WEEK !

    hugs
    shakira

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  32. PattiKenMarch 22, 2010 at 11:46 AM

    Ji: Thank you! I am honored!

    Shakira: Thank you! Have a great week!

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  33. AnonymousMarch 23, 2010 at 6:52 PM

    Succinct, efficient and concise. You got a lot of work done in 55 words! :)

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  34. KBMarch 23, 2010 at 10:22 PM

    Wow. This reminds me of my ex. Apart from the knife part of course. Excellent.

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  35. PattiKenMarch 23, 2010 at 11:19 PM

    Ti: Thanks! Are you home from the race?

    KB: Oh, good. So glad you weren't commenting from Cell Block B!

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