tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post4622960949468977093..comments2024-03-19T03:27:24.739-04:00Comments on PattiKen and the Muses: And when the door finally closesPattiKenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-21133838445232859982011-05-05T10:56:26.590-04:002011-05-05T10:56:26.590-04:00Powerfully orchestrated form and message. I enjoye...Powerfully orchestrated form and message. I enjoyed what the refrains added to the emotional impact of the piece. Nicely written ~ RoseAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09988016086874324471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-23900671509143802962011-05-04T17:27:40.627-04:002011-05-04T17:27:40.627-04:00This was filled with both pain and hope. Wonderful...This was filled with both pain and hope. Wonderfully crafted.Tara R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/02993625193184914299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-86524573752575460072011-05-04T15:22:14.069-04:002011-05-04T15:22:14.069-04:00(((((Patti)))))(((((Patti)))))G-Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14968807697181554781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-19209114728136185762011-05-04T14:54:13.646-04:002011-05-04T14:54:13.646-04:00There's a life journey in these stanzas... str...There's a life journey in these stanzas... strength, determination, decision and change all launched from a foundation of closing the right door.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-23668488440999216042011-05-04T14:28:47.960-04:002011-05-04T14:28:47.960-04:00That's liberating!! The sadness is so well mas...That's liberating!! The sadness is so well masked by that promise made to oneself..the promise to see oneself FREE!! Memories (even the unpleasant ones) can help in taking us where we REALLY wish to be...provided we steer them well! <br /><br />Such a wonderfully well written poem, Patti... leaves a lasting impression on one's mind.. for mine, for sure!Kavitahttp://kavisionz.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-67632560110341200072011-05-04T13:52:04.962-04:002011-05-04T13:52:04.962-04:00powerful write, thank you!powerful write, thank you!Apryl Gonzaleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04387238145856711796noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-63252419578977455002011-05-04T12:25:23.140-04:002011-05-04T12:25:23.140-04:00Sometimes you take out the trash, sometimes the tr...Sometimes you take out the trash, sometimes the trash takes itself out. Nice piece, PKBubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-39180238036625037102011-05-04T07:59:28.254-04:002011-05-04T07:59:28.254-04:00I can honestly say I've never been in an abusi...I can honestly say I've never been in an abusive relationship (Yes, women abuse men, too). That said, it doesn't mean I can't find myself transported there by a good poem - that I can't empathize and understand. I do. And I love this piece. Well done.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13024392628362568010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-19417636535820918072011-05-04T06:29:35.199-04:002011-05-04T06:29:35.199-04:00Love how you use the repetition to steadily build ...Love how you use the repetition to steadily build the narrator's confidence into an independence. I'm sure they will be just fine now that they have lost the loser and found themselves.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-56019503703272392972011-05-04T00:59:35.581-04:002011-05-04T00:59:35.581-04:00love that she finally opens the door to herself an...love that she finally opens the door to herself and closes it on the bad man. beautiful, sad, but still hopeful.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01547380098561803645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-54676975616857745122011-05-04T00:18:20.870-04:002011-05-04T00:18:20.870-04:00I find always, there is a charm to repetitive line...I find always, there is a charm to repetitive lines in poetry. It gives a certain power to the poem, and here, it just oozed. You have a way with words, Patti. Beautifully said!<br /><br /><a href="http://wp.me/p11nRA-YC" rel="nofollow">My One Shot Poem</a>Vinay Leo R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13132856855570330824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-37588720789269131872011-05-03T23:32:02.277-04:002011-05-03T23:32:02.277-04:00In your work, you have a powerful way of nailing t...In your work, you have a powerful way of nailing the challenges of relationships. And there are so many. I love the positive twist at the end.Janicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10882248671520480556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-81568518732800051012011-05-03T21:16:07.875-04:002011-05-03T21:16:07.875-04:00FINALLY! And it is good...FINALLY! And it is good...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12460881702249079009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-29653620997954232402011-05-03T20:26:11.041-04:002011-05-03T20:26:11.041-04:00One of the best pieces I have the the pleasure to ...One of the best pieces I have the the pleasure to read in a very long time.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-16701201167435476612011-05-03T20:02:46.741-04:002011-05-03T20:02:46.741-04:00oh that last line Patti...a deep sigh and a heart ...oh that last line Patti...a deep sigh and a heart full of lovingkindess...beautiful!Laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15349928247626849914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-5548404329628313442011-05-03T19:59:46.154-04:002011-05-03T19:59:46.154-04:00Beautifully written. Your words evoke such a sense...Beautifully written. Your words evoke such a sense of regret, and renewed hope. I hope the footsteps fade forever.Ben Langhinrichshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16077213274836551992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-12889628839371959562011-05-03T19:59:26.774-04:002011-05-03T19:59:26.774-04:00Open the door to a life of peace-lovely!Open the door to a life of peace-lovely!ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-74108802065619261232011-05-03T19:23:08.959-04:002011-05-03T19:23:08.959-04:00Love the build up and release to the last line. A...Love the build up and release to the last line. Admirable piece. Thank you for sharing.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15515148975353849650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-80145472564802680022011-05-03T19:20:23.825-04:002011-05-03T19:20:23.825-04:00"And open the door to myself, finally."
..."And open the door to myself, finally."<br /><br />yes. you build to this very nicely... i hope she continues to walk in the freedom of that open door...Lesliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01221703763145912238noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-18592830905990026872011-05-03T18:56:45.009-04:002011-05-03T18:56:45.009-04:00I almost don't know what to say to this, Patti...I almost don't know what to say to this, Patti, except I hope the door closes forever and soon for any and all people who find themselves in these horrors. <br /><br />This was exceptionally good. <br /><br />XxooJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-77146816474934533662011-05-03T18:47:31.331-04:002011-05-03T18:47:31.331-04:00Domestic violence is a situation that erodes confi...Domestic violence is a situation that erodes confidence, independence, trust, self-esteem. I commend anyone who's able to extricate themselves from it. Great post.Belindahttp://thehalfwaypoint.net/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-75887946086339108092011-05-03T18:22:56.873-04:002011-05-03T18:22:56.873-04:00great poem sad story thanks for sharinggreat poem sad story thanks for sharingAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10624767707167052328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-18833771980115341612011-05-03T17:21:04.735-04:002011-05-03T17:21:04.735-04:00The repetition enhance the effect of the abuse, an...The repetition enhance the effect of the abuse, and these lines really got to me, <br />"I’ll listen instead for the whimpered words<br />Of our son as he cried in his sleep."<br />Meaningful as well as emotional.dustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-18762061658007585672011-05-03T17:16:57.887-04:002011-05-03T17:16:57.887-04:00Powerful with an excellent last line.Powerful with an excellent last line.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-20506891696152164262011-05-03T17:09:58.322-04:002011-05-03T17:09:58.322-04:00amazing poem.. really felt the emotion. great writ...amazing poem.. really felt the emotion. great write!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03359959975341890512noreply@blogger.com