tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post2721686559360365000..comments2024-03-19T03:27:24.739-04:00Comments on PattiKen and the Muses: Away from HerePattiKenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-65663882914059011672010-08-01T16:49:42.863-04:002010-08-01T16:49:42.863-04:00Hi Pattiken..been away for a week and am catching ...Hi Pattiken..been away for a week and am catching up..an excellent poem that appealed to my love of all things historical..cheers PeteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-86154225252326826862010-07-28T23:36:30.914-04:002010-07-28T23:36:30.914-04:00PattiKen
A wonderful poem on Egyptian pyramids a...PattiKen<br /><br />A wonderful poem on Egyptian pyramids and those who helped build them. One of the true wonders of this natural world, so much we still do not know about the mysteries in that sacred land of Egypt. Thanks for the good read, and thanks to Desert Rose for her comment to shed some light on the things we do not know.<br /><br />Lovely poem.<br />Joannyjoannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03338150531816845279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-29614876990126902632010-07-28T19:13:01.534-04:002010-07-28T19:13:01.534-04:00Yes, you too became that entity you imagined. I ha...Yes, you too became that entity you imagined. I haven't been there but I saw the exhibits and took the courses. Don't we all imagine what life bound to drudgery like that must have been like! You capture the feel of it and the ache of it and the imaginary release from it that it would have taken to keep hope alive. Well done.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-51018383130460125802010-07-28T18:45:17.375-04:002010-07-28T18:45:17.375-04:00Historians now speculate that farmers worked the p...Historians now speculate that farmers worked the pyramids in the 'off season'. Yah, like anyone would WANT to tote those rocks. Great poem made me feel I was there.Monkey Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06741294113777908130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-36928068877007104932010-07-28T16:02:53.066-04:002010-07-28T16:02:53.066-04:00Lovely poem about the need to break free...
You...Lovely poem about the need to break free...<br />You've expressed it so beautifully here, Patti... <br />Really enjoyed the read!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-29435773380033876982010-07-28T13:06:14.920-04:002010-07-28T13:06:14.920-04:00there's an amazing flow in your writing - and ...there's an amazing flow in your writing - and the cry for freedom...speaks to me...thanks PattiClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-58998187238173755882010-07-28T12:00:31.484-04:002010-07-28T12:00:31.484-04:00To everyone: Thank you so much for your kind comme...To everyone: Thank you so much for your kind comments. "Poet" is not a term I'd ever apply to myself, so your encouragement means so much. I really appreciate it.<br /><br />How lucky we are to have the contribution of an Egyptologist. Thank you, Desert Rose! I'm sure you are right about the commitment the slaves must have felt, but let's say that my poem speaks for the one infidel in the pack who really resents the whole thing. Not only did I speak for him, but for anyone who feels chained to daily drudgery, whether voluntarily or not.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-69123547229039959702010-07-28T09:22:01.241-04:002010-07-28T09:22:01.241-04:00intriguing. i guess i'm kind of slow, it took...intriguing. i guess i'm kind of slow, it took me a couple of reads to realize what you were saying. then it was like...duh... lol<br /><br />very well done!<br />smiles,Jessiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11173809658342411265noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-55569114797745955622010-07-28T08:01:55.913-04:002010-07-28T08:01:55.913-04:00Man, makes you think... We're all a bit like t...Man, makes you think... We're all a bit like that slave in our everyday working lives, really. And, yes, it is insane that someone would want a grand building erected to them when they're not even going to see the inside of it until after they're dead! Bizarre!<br /><br />Nice read, Patti. Very nice. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-66580843497169597542010-07-28T06:37:40.574-04:002010-07-28T06:37:40.574-04:00Amazing poem and i love Egyptian history, great li...Amazing poem and i love Egyptian history, great lines. I came by one-stop but i remember when you visited me from Urban Cowboy's blog nice to see you again Patti~<br /><br />Wild Rose~Wild Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05260455210731142858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-42139706436198011012010-07-28T06:20:27.350-04:002010-07-28T06:20:27.350-04:00Interesting change of tone halfway down as though ...Interesting change of tone halfway down as though the poem is a reflection of the thoughts of those building monuments, it also read to me as an extended metaphor for those that labour in difficult work or personal relationships. I do poetry for fun rather than publication so for this week <i>only</i>, I’ve nervously posted an example from each of my blogs: an Elegy from <a href="http://meawriter.wordpress.com/2010/07/11/no-shed-no-tears-for-i-need-them-not/" rel="nofollow">Scribbles and Diversions</a>, a Gogyohka from <a href="http://randomtwitterstories.blogspot.com/2010/07/summers-walk.html" rel="nofollow">Random Twitter Stories</a>, and free verse poem from <a href="http://ramdom-short-stories.blogspot.com/2010/07/pillow-grows-cold.html" rel="nofollow">Random Short Stories</a>.John (@bookdreamer)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11576434749272275190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-5838488145855710632010-07-28T03:34:31.803-04:002010-07-28T03:34:31.803-04:00Interesting take on an aspect of history we all &q...Interesting take on an aspect of history we all "know" we very seldom think of those who actually built such gargantuan structures<br />"We tug blocks of hardened yesterdays<br />Across the sand, inching toward everlasting tomorrow"Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08915236568015079389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-40230928537351094252010-07-28T02:47:17.490-04:002010-07-28T02:47:17.490-04:00History is only written about the great and the po...History is only written about the great and the powerful. Only poets can bring to life the lives of the common men.Rinkly Rimeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07890344869337115307noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-27663028274423595382010-07-28T01:35:37.521-04:002010-07-28T01:35:37.521-04:00The first stanza is so powerful! What a wonderful ...The first stanza is so powerful! What a wonderful work this is!TALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-22234109426415665232010-07-28T00:32:01.997-04:002010-07-28T00:32:01.997-04:00Patti...This was fantastic!!
I felt like I was the...Patti...This was fantastic!!<br />I felt like I was there...g-manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05597285773359986622noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-67269015642979928092010-07-27T23:42:12.001-04:002010-07-27T23:42:12.001-04:00Very interesting poem. I was intrigued by Desert ...Very interesting poem. I was intrigued by Desert Rose's comments, but I think the poem works anyway as an echo of anyone who has been forced to submit to another.Ben Langhinrichshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16077213274836551992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-28575023663550064712010-07-27T23:35:45.112-04:002010-07-27T23:35:45.112-04:00I enjoyed this. As story, and as something that op...I enjoyed this. As story, and as something that opens some contemplation. Thanks. - BillPastor Billhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06104455258922539567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-28875554194531962222010-07-27T21:37:01.073-04:002010-07-27T21:37:01.073-04:00One of my dreams is to visit Epypt...so much myste...One of my dreams is to visit Epypt...so much mystery and magic...just like your poem. I really enjoyed it so much.Thought provoking as well :) Thanks for sharing my friend ~ AmandaAmandahttp://buttercup600.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-14396187688609812842010-07-27T20:00:26.928-04:002010-07-27T20:00:26.928-04:00Powerful poem that is still relevent today. Maybe ...Powerful poem that is still relevent today. Maybe not as much physically but more emotionally. Great job!Corbiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08168756186612658336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-13877273316905640212010-07-27T19:51:10.466-04:002010-07-27T19:51:10.466-04:00Excellent, also enjoyed reading of "Desert Ro...Excellent, also enjoyed reading of "Desert Rose's " comment as well. Amazing histories that spark so much though! Wonderful writing!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-7832567438627214542010-07-27T19:17:38.539-04:002010-07-27T19:17:38.539-04:00Being an Egyptologist,i understand this piece quit...Being an Egyptologist,i understand this piece quite well..yet,one thing i know about Egyptian workers and slaves who used to carry on the stones for building the pyramids or the relegious temples and tombs for the Pharaohs ,they did it with love..:) and total submission to their lords,not unwillingly..mostly they were Enjoying their jobs as working for their Deified kings later on,after all i believe such amazing works of creaticity and glorious civilisation,couldve never been an outcome of miserable slavery alone..:)<br />i apologize for being lengthy,but i really Enjoyed the poem..and the idea stroke me..i visited every tomb and temple in Egypt..i just relate to that atmosphere..lovely read..thank you for sharing..:)Desert Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17370899545012572162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-60324576710477522162010-07-27T19:05:21.689-04:002010-07-27T19:05:21.689-04:00This is a poem I love to read both fast and then s...This is a poem I love to read both fast and then slow, respectively. Enjoyed that, lines that can sound good as both structured stanza and flowing line. Your tone and detail make the lines easy to picture. thanksdustushttp://dustus.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-22881090634508151272010-07-27T18:55:39.508-04:002010-07-27T18:55:39.508-04:00"Blocks of hardened yesterdays..." this ..."Blocks of hardened yesterdays..." this sentence alone tells an entire story. You gave this slave a voice that crosses thousands of years and echoes the chains that still fetter millions to this day.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-58094664894795767022010-07-27T18:18:07.661-04:002010-07-27T18:18:07.661-04:00I can imagine those thoughts being thought through...I can imagine those thoughts being thought throughout the history of slavery. They did so much to build the 'civilisations' that the 'civilised' couldn't build themselves.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5798063279768967876.post-76525370983682696782010-07-27T18:10:00.148-04:002010-07-27T18:10:00.148-04:00nice write...crazy to imagine the life of a slave ...nice write...crazy to imagine the life of a slave building a tomb for a man that is not dead yet...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com